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Wednesday #Poetry: Damp, Incensed, Skid

Welcome to my regular Wednesday poetry corner, brought to you by Three Word Wednesday and One Shot Wednesday.

Today's words are Damp, Incensed, Skid.

Damp fog enshrouded Skid Row
Hiding all crimes from lampglow
Beyond reason incensed,
His right arm all tensed,
The mugger drew back for a blow

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17 comments:

  1. SamMay 18, 2011, 8:50:00 AM

    I like this! Great atmosphere to it, I could almost feel the fog swirling around me as I read it.

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  2. Janet Lingel AldrichMay 18, 2011, 8:53:00 AM

    Spooky! I know you said "Skid Row", but could be Whitechapel!

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  3. Brian MillerMay 18, 2011, 9:00:00 AM

    vivid...life in the shadows can be that way...

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  4. UnknownMay 18, 2011, 11:52:00 AM

    A shady little diddy.

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  5. Sheilagh LeeMay 18, 2011, 2:47:00 PM

    Sheilagh Lee said I love the use of Skid row.you could picture it all.

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  6. moondustwriterMay 18, 2011, 3:40:00 PM

    Ya know if I were a mugger you would have given me the perfect scenario

    Love your lightheartedness in a foggy day.

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  7. Sylvia NeyMay 18, 2011, 3:59:00 PM

    VERY good!

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  8. Jess PJMay 18, 2011, 7:34:00 PM

    dark, yet fun

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  9. ayalaMay 18, 2011, 9:00:00 PM

    Vivid and dark ....

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  10. Ramesh SoodMay 19, 2011, 8:11:00 AM

    That's what a Mugger is supposed to do..well did he..

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  11. AnonymousMay 19, 2011, 9:19:00 AM

    I love the tension you creating in just a few lines.

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  12. AltonianMay 19, 2011, 11:12:00 AM

    Very atmospheric & entertaining poem; but a mugger wouldn't find much worthwhile on skid row - would he?

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  13. Tony NolandMay 19, 2011, 6:49:00 PM

    Thanks for reading and for the comments, guys! As it happens Old Altonian, I had the word "killer" in place of "mugger", right up to the final draft, when I changed it. I pulled the punch at the last minute. Somehow, it seems to fit more with a noir atmosphere, rather than being a clear Jack the Ripper homage which "killer" would have invoked. Too far in the other direction?

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  14. AnonymousMay 20, 2011, 2:01:00 AM

    Great use of the words

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  15. RMPMay 20, 2011, 9:42:00 PM

    tight piece. you painted an intense picture...both visually and emotionally

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  16. AnonymousMay 23, 2011, 1:31:00 PM

    Well done; your poem /
    swirls with tension and thick fog, /
    waiting for the punch.

    http://beespoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/23/a-good-man/
    I went light this week, because last week's (Romeo Before Juliet) wasn't my best work.

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  17. Hyde Park Poetry PalaceMay 25, 2011, 11:43:00 AM

    magical capture of your sentiments, way to go,

    share a piece with us today.

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