Each Wednesday, I write a limerick based on the prompt from Three Word Wednesday. Today's words are: draft, locate, serenity
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Update:
It's been brought to my attention that "serenity" doesn't rhyme with "from me", and that my meter is poor.
I invite you all to judge this revision:
Must locate the duct tape again -
That draft from the cracked window pane
Keeps serenity
At a distance from me
Can't write, 'cause distraction's my bane
~~~~~ * * * ~~~~~
There
are so many great limericks in my book. The only thing separating you
from them? A lousy buck. But maybe you don't like to laugh?You can read more of my limericks inspired by Three Word Wednesday in my e.book, which is cleverly titled:
Poetry on the Fly: Limericks Inspired by Three Word Wednesday
Only $0.99 - less than a hot dog at the convenience store!
Don't have a Kindle? NO PROBLEM! Get one of the free Kindle apps for PC, Mac, iPhone, Android and a host of other devices. You can read "Poetry on the Fly" or any of my other great books anywhere you like!
Update:
It's been brought to my attention that "serenity" doesn't rhyme with "from me", and that my meter is poor.
I invite you all to judge this revision:
Must locate the duct tape again -
That draft from the cracked window pane
Keeps serenity
In sere paucity
Can't write, 'cause distraction's my bane
Update to the Update:
My interlocutor isn't satisfied with the revision. Rhyme is better, but the meter is still wrong.
I invite you all to judge this revision to the revision:
Must locate the duct tape again -
That draft from the cracked window pane!
It's pure enmity
To serenity,
To serenity,
Can't write, 'cause distraction's my bane
Funny limerick! Well I have to say I like the original, Tony.
ReplyDeleteI love all of them Tony but the first is my favourite
ReplyDeleteMe too, like them all but the first is my favourite. Well done all three.
ReplyDeleteFirst is my favorite. I think the rhythm outweighs the need for the words to be perfectly rhymed, and that the limerick itself gives rise to various pronunciations, especially in the British Empire (thinking not only of English, but also Scottish and Irish, perhaps others) dialects. Seems most great poems had a bit of that in them. Lovely, by the way. A few of us thought about writing for some strange reason. I liked that you used a variant definition of "draft" than the writing one as well.
ReplyDeleteThat last draft is ideal. I like the paring down, the succinctness and diction.
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