I finished the initial pass of corrections to my WIP first draft. This consists of pretty basic stuff, such as:
With a binder full of marked up hardcopy, the next step will be to start rewriting the text to implement these corrections. I also need a better ending, but I'm confident that will come.
At some point, I'll have to post a few pictures to explain how I solved the problem of using a 3-ring binder on an airplane fold-down tray. It's an elegant solution, even if it does involve duct tape.
- determining the genders of certain characters
- the existence (or removal) of other characters
- deciding on the balance of furious vs. suicidal for my MC
- settling on the spelling of names
- flagging the big sections of tell, tell, tell so I can replace them with show, show, show
- noting where I need more action, better dialogue
With a binder full of marked up hardcopy, the next step will be to start rewriting the text to implement these corrections. I also need a better ending, but I'm confident that will come.
At some point, I'll have to post a few pictures to explain how I solved the problem of using a 3-ring binder on an airplane fold-down tray. It's an elegant solution, even if it does involve duct tape.
Of characters whose genders were not solidified, how do the solidification breakdown? 1-1 m/f? 0-0 tie, soccer style?
ReplyDeleteLet's see...
Delete* one man became a woman
* two women who were in the background with non-speaking roles got elevated to minor speaking parts
* one man was briefly switched to a woman, but changed back pretty quickly
* one new woman was introduced, but since she was only on for a single scene, I cut her and gave her lines to someone else
Interesting, and I'm looking forward to the pictures. Who isn't a fan of duct tape?
ReplyDeleteI'm trying to decide if I should be like all the cool kids and do a vine video instead of posting a series of pictures.
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